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Smile
Oct 15, 2007 20:57:07 GMT
Post by Sophie on Oct 15, 2007 20:57:07 GMT
A poem I wrote during the summer. It's never been shown to anyone before. A smile Is when the corners of your lips Turn up Like this: A smile Is what creeps across my face When I see you You are the reason My lips turn up Like this: Nothing they say Can stop you Making me Smile
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Oct 16, 2007 15:31:40 GMT
Post by teknotom on Oct 16, 2007 15:31:40 GMT
I don't get the positioning...
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Oct 16, 2007 15:39:30 GMT
Post by Sophie on Oct 16, 2007 15:39:30 GMT
Well, it was initially hand written, in the shape of a smile. It didn't work on here, hence the edit to find something else. May just centre-align it and be done with it, actually, for ease of reading.
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Smile
Oct 16, 2007 16:55:12 GMT
Post by Katie™ on Oct 16, 2007 16:55:12 GMT
It made me smile...although it's kinda like a children's poem
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Oct 16, 2007 16:58:30 GMT
Post by Sophie on Oct 16, 2007 16:58:30 GMT
Well, I was in a childish mood when I wrote it. I'm always in that mood
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Smile
Oct 16, 2007 17:14:51 GMT
Post by Katie™ on Oct 16, 2007 17:14:51 GMT
I wasn't meaning that badly by the way, I like it
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Smile
Oct 16, 2007 21:43:05 GMT
Post by Kaila on Oct 16, 2007 21:43:05 GMT
I liked it, 'tis makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
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Smile
Oct 17, 2007 15:38:49 GMT
Post by Sophie on Oct 17, 2007 15:38:49 GMT
Aww, glad you like it. I wasn't too sure about it, whether it was /too/ childish, but it seems to have gone down well.
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Smile
Oct 17, 2007 15:44:01 GMT
Post by Kaila on Oct 17, 2007 15:44:01 GMT
No its very simplistic. Some might find it childish, but I kind of think theres an adult undertone to it, because its so simplistic and straightforward.
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